Brian,
You have a marketable document. My recommendation without knowing your writing background is check your document with an editor software. I am using Word Editor as I write this. Your document requires several years of college or equivalent experience to comprehend.
I have been writing policies and procedures as a power plant SME since 2001 when I started in power generation as an operator. At first, I was updating obsolete information which led to challenging and testing the present information and then creating new information.
I wrote to impress. My work required college level knowledge to comprehend although most power plant personnel are not college educated.
Eventually a colleague informed me that "makes sense to Larry does not equal makes sense to all". I took some writing courses and started using editor checking software. I am not a professional technical writer, but I play one at work 😊The overall grade to read my work dropped from as high as grade 18 to averaging around grade 11 and sometimes lower. O&M documents require some technical jargon and structure so score high grade levels.
The average reader in the US today successfully comprehends about 8th grade. Material written above is challenging for most. Writing O&M documents requires a grade level above 8 but I simplify where possible with Word Editor.
Reading your book, I thought at first, we might be in competition. Now complete, I think our documents complement each other. Mine is not ready for peer review yet because my first reviewer is my wife, and I only gave it to her today. She has no maintenance background but trains teachers how to teach and is an excellent reviewer because she knows language and not maintenance.
When ready, I will follow your lead and seek peer review here.
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Larry James
Lockout Larry
1. Personnel 2. Environment 3. Equipment 4. Revenue
Reno NV
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Original Message:
Sent: 01-23-2024 03:27 PM
From: Brian La Dieu, CMRP
Subject: Peer Review Request
Good Day my fellow Maintenance Enthusiasts, I'm requesting a peer review of the attached before publishing. Please provide feedback at your earliest convenience so I may make the appropriate corrections as suggested and go to print soonest. Thank you very much for taking your precious time to help me with this endeavor. Please email comments with the subject PEER REVIEW to bjladieu@gmail.com.
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Brian La Dieu, CMRP
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